Matt Bellamy

There’s a crown on his head, though it doesn’t sparkle with jewels. The thorns are like fire, and the pain overrules. The second line seems a little long and breaks ...

This: "The little girl that once was me" should probably be "The little girl who once was me". The repetition of "I'm fading faster/Into this disaster" gets a little too ...

"I can't get no help" should be "I can't get any help". "Till" should be until, or "'til". Apart from that, this is good. I like your rhyming scheme, and ...

Some of the lines are a little long and break the flow a little, making it feel slightly less poetic, particularly the third line. "Lovely" isn't very decriptive, what else ...

Hey, I'd like to remind you that everyone should write two reviews by posting their own work. Also...it's not very humble to say that your poem is good in your ...

This is difficult to critique as I'm sure that it will set the mood for a book, something a little Lord of the Rings-esque, I'm thinking. Out of context, I ...

The first stanza doesn't flow very well because the lines are so short. I would suggest changing it into just one or two lines. Also, I don't like that mutilated ...

A couple of nit-picky things - Miles doesn't rhyme with times, and sucking gum sounds weird when it's usually chewed. Oh and it should be around, not round, or 'round ...

“She’s lonely.” And she was – she had no friends. This line is a bit long, and breaks the flow a little since the preceding line was quite short, so ...

This was okay. Your rhyming is a bit off - you start with an AABB scheme, then the second stanza didn't rhyme at all, and the rest seems filled with ...

Firstly, your rhyming is a bit strange. The first line doesn't rhyme with anything, and you use words with the same sound five times out of eight - hill, will, ...

Ooh, haikus are difficult. The first line is good. The second line, well it depends if you're talking about one fish or two. You say fish breaks, which sounds like ...

Ahh, my first poem I loved was about the rain too. I think this rhymed a little too much, I mean, eight out of thirteen lines rhymed with be, or ...

Less questions, and less of this: ........ It doesn't add anything to the poem, and your words should speak for itself instead of relying on excessive punctuation. I would change ...

This was okay. One thing that niggled at me was that the rhymes sound a bit forced, so much so that I felt you were just saying things for the ...